Kpfan12
Welp published my first actual story which the prologue is done but any ideas for the first chapter?
Kpfan12
@ Snip-6969 well that seems like a good idea i might put the boxs P.O.V during the teleportation
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Snip-6969
@Kpfan12 also some criticism, I don't consider "oh no the portal has brought us into another world with 0 context" but it's easily fixable in later chapters if you can get creative, but NOT "god called you for help" neither "scientists made a portal and accidentally got you here" I myself have an example, the portal can be the enemies attempt to capture them by teleporting them to their base but instead got them to another world cuz some goofy box accidentally dropped a cup of coffee to the teleportation crystal energy stone thing or such because bully box decided to do a funny, the box facility went into a panic outrage trying to figure out a way to NOT teleport the Titans into a unfavorable spot in the facility so in a last ditch effort decided to teleport them to another dimension instead which forbids them from ever stealing the advanced technology in the Titans but also erases their presence and ability to turn the tides of war.
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