★★★
Three out of five stars for embracing LGBTQ
Author: TheAmateurWriter1
Genre: Teen fiction/ Romance
Review:
This book has so much potential in the religious and LGBTQ world. Perhaps it could change the way we see LGBTQ. Most people mentally sepearate religion from LGBTQ, and I'm sure it doesn't have to be that way because it's not supposed to be.
This book can really change the way we think.
However, I found it difficult to focus on the setting, plot and characters for two reasons. First of all, there isn't enough description. Second of all, I was being distracted by the punctuation and grammar mistakes.
I would suggest the following amendments to the author:
* Use shorter sentences. They are easier to read and much more effective.
*Your writing style reminds me of what my former English teacher calls "comma-splicing". You're separating your sentences with commas instead of periods (known as full stops in the UK). I would highly recommend fixing this.
*Capitalize words like Bible, I, Christian etc.
I'd like to emphasise that Experience the light has a lot of potential to grow into an exceptional book. It's not going to happen overnight. Nurture it, use critique to improve and keep writing!
It'll get there!
YOU ARE READING
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