Comments I left myself for editing Draft 3 (there aren't as many as there were on Good Grief, but still some funny ones):
My draft: "No, I'm dead," I respond, my tone biting.
Me: Half of my brain is in love with Ash, the other half is making Kid Snippets references (see The Wand of Universal Power)
My draft: I glance at him, but only for a moment. "I'm fine." And I am.
Me: she scares meee
My draft: Like a moment of clarity piercing through insanity...
Me: oH
well this is unfair
Me, later: oHH
i forgot but then i realized
ouch
(remember how page 250 goes, y'all? moments of clarity and all that?)
My draft: ...and panic hits me like a freight train.
Me: ~squoosh~
My draft: ...with one stray glance.
Me: *from the top of a distant tank* STRAY GLANCE WORLD DOMINTATION-!
(in other words, Kingdom did not make me less of a Stay XD)
Minho: "Okay, woah, there are more of you than I thought."
Me: - Lee Taeyong
(also props to Minho for being this terrible of a leader XD)
My draft: I am, in fact, very much not okay.
Me: beautiful.
Me: Gerard Way would relate.
My draft: I've seen stranger things.
Me: *wheezing*
(I've never seen Stranger Things, but ya know)
My draft: *moment of friendship with Thomas*
Me: k but this is cute
Me, later, looking at my comment in horror: I ThOUGHT I MEANT THE BOY SCREAMING WAS CUTE I WAS SO CONFUSED
My draft: "Smart," Minho says. "Hey, everyone, find a partner..."
Me, single: *surprised Pikachu face*
My draft: When I focus my eyes, I can see the collections of buildings as well.
Me: does she have binocular eyes or what
My draft: ...we both exchange confused expressions.
Me: BARTER LIKE A BARBARIAN, MATES
My draft: *contains the word block*
Me: b
Me: lol
(stan Block B, cowards)
My draft: *uses the word flare*
Me: *uncontrollable wheezing*
My draft: Thomas is beside him, looking equally pressed and stoic.
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