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This is a story I've been working on, but before I get into it, I'm wanting to see about getting some feedback. This first chapter isn't completed yet, but what I wanted to inquire, is if this story would have any sort of interest in it.
Basically, I'm wanting some feed-back, and critique.
And when I say that, I actually mean it.
I want to know if this story actually would generate genuine interest.
And if not but there could be something different, I want to know.
Get opinions and things of the sort.
BUT, enough of that, some general info on the story.
Desert Viper follows the tale of two characters, Morpheus and Veera, from Veera's POV. It takes place in a somewhat alternate world where there is no rain and nearly all the fresh water on the planet has dried up. Most of the population is focused on the shores of the continents, where they have the ability and man-power to purify the ocean's water. The centers of the land masses however, have become vast deserts, home mostly to Exiles, Burn-Outs, and Nomads. That is where Morpheus and Veera live, in the Sun Dust desert to be precise, and it is there where this story begins.
Basically, I'm wanting some feed-back, and critique.
And when I say that, I actually mean it.
I want to know if this story actually would generate genuine interest.
And if not but there could be something different, I want to know.
Get opinions and things of the sort.
BUT, enough of that, some general info on the story.
Desert Viper follows the tale of two characters, Morpheus and Veera, from Veera's POV. It takes place in a somewhat alternate world where there is no rain and nearly all the fresh water on the planet has dried up. Most of the population is focused on the shores of the continents, where they have the ability and man-power to purify the ocean's water. The centers of the land masses however, have become vast deserts, home mostly to Exiles, Burn-Outs, and Nomads. That is where Morpheus and Veera live, in the Sun Dust desert to be precise, and it is there where this story begins.
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I'm not particularly good at offering any sort of critique for stories or plots in general so I'll just refrain, not that I have any advice to offer in the first place. ;)
That said, it piqued my interest. I'd definitely like to see more. The story has an interesting setting and looks like it could lead off in multiple directions, if needed.
That said, it piqued my interest. I'd definitely like to see more. The story has an interesting setting and looks like it could lead off in multiple directions, if needed.
Thank you, the comment does help. : )
Though not necessarily critique, it does help to boost my confidence a bit. ~<3
Though not necessarily critique, it does help to boost my confidence a bit. ~<3
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