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Why don't you scare me like everyone else?
I should be worried about my own health.
Instead I'm sitting here beside myself.
I'm not wanting to let them down.
I made a promise I didn't think I'd need,
To keep in my lifetime but now I can see,
If I don't stay here what kind of man would I be?
I'll keep on fighting as long as I I breathe.
It's kinda funny how things like to change.
Priorities falter when your life's rearranged.
To be here for family, well it's not even that strange,
When you know what you're here for.
I know you'll come for me one of these days.
I'm not going to cower, I'm not going to shake.
As long as I'm breathing, you won't have me stray.
From what's most important to me.
You don't even scare me like everyone else?
I'm not even worried, you're just a bunch of cells.
Instead I'm sitting here pleased with myself.
I'm not going to let them down.
I'm not going to let them down.
I should be worried about my own health.
Instead I'm sitting here beside myself.
I'm not wanting to let them down.
I made a promise I didn't think I'd need,
To keep in my lifetime but now I can see,
If I don't stay here what kind of man would I be?
I'll keep on fighting as long as I I breathe.
It's kinda funny how things like to change.
Priorities falter when your life's rearranged.
To be here for family, well it's not even that strange,
When you know what you're here for.
I know you'll come for me one of these days.
I'm not going to cower, I'm not going to shake.
As long as I'm breathing, you won't have me stray.
From what's most important to me.
You don't even scare me like everyone else?
I'm not even worried, you're just a bunch of cells.
Instead I'm sitting here pleased with myself.
I'm not going to let them down.
I'm not going to let them down.
Category Music / Other Music
Species Rabbit / Hare
Gender Any
Size 99 x 120px
File Size 2.97 MB
Yep, this one is all me. Betcha a smart one like you knows what it's all about.
Heya pal! I recorded this probably a year and a half ago just to get it down on "tape" as it were. I played my '70s Winston nylon string classical as it was the only acoustic I had at the time and recorded it with the internal mic on my computer. It's a bit hot in some places, so I had never uploaded it. Plus I'm really shy about my lyrics so it's hard for me to show original lyrics, especially when they deal with such a personal topic. Every song I've ever written nearly kills me, because if I think the quality of the lyrics are good enough to share, it's usually because it's way too personal a topic and I end up not sharing anyhow.
Last night, I threw caution to the wind though.
Last night, I threw caution to the wind though.
When I get my new acoustic back from the shop, I intend on it. I'm thinking about a bridge or a prechorus or something to break it up.
HART!
OK, that was awsome. So i'll do for for you what I did to Kurt and just break down the bits I like and the bits I'm not to sure about and hopefully you won't hate me afterwards ya?
If I don't stay here what kind of man would I be? - This line has slightly too many syallables.
As a whole, the thing is lovely and the simplicity really works. I like the theme, the opening with a question is nice and I very much like:
Instead I'm sitting here beside myself.
It evokes very nice imagery.
The second to last "I'm not going to let them down." seems to be a touch to drawn out, but therwise its lovely, very singable, now I've run through the lyrics a couple of time and I like the sound of the strings, very nice, quite classic.
Don't hurt me?
OK, that was awsome. So i'll do for for you what I did to Kurt and just break down the bits I like and the bits I'm not to sure about and hopefully you won't hate me afterwards ya?
If I don't stay here what kind of man would I be? - This line has slightly too many syallables.
As a whole, the thing is lovely and the simplicity really works. I like the theme, the opening with a question is nice and I very much like:
Instead I'm sitting here beside myself.
It evokes very nice imagery.
The second to last "I'm not going to let them down." seems to be a touch to drawn out, but therwise its lovely, very singable, now I've run through the lyrics a couple of time and I like the sound of the strings, very nice, quite classic.
Don't hurt me?
*stabs repeatedly*
No not really. Thanks for the lovely comments and constructive criticism. I like the extra syllables, I'm keepin' 'em
No not really. Thanks for the lovely comments and constructive criticism. I like the extra syllables, I'm keepin' 'em
*cuddles gratefully* Wow, so much positive attention. I need to write more songs!
Thanks very kindly :) Also I hope you find a bit of determination in there too.
Holey sh*z. Great stuff. Just the sound of it makes me all chokey and wet-eyed!
Aww thanks for all the great comments on my stuff. It's nice to come home to some nice constructive comments.
I really like this. ^-^ Sadness but strength at the same time.
... sorry I am not really a critic, and have no awesome words to use. D:
... sorry I am not really a critic, and have no awesome words to use. D:
Hey, you got exactly what I was going for, so you win! Thank you :)
Also, thank you for the fav, it means a lot to me, especially on this one.
a sweet sound, and deep, profound.
very personal and intimate, honest to goodness musical expression. I really like it!
very personal and intimate, honest to goodness musical expression. I really like it!
I feel that people really understand this song and that makes me feel so great! Maybe it's time I revisit it and do it some real justice. Thank you for faving it, it means so very much.
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