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Villainy
Making VILLAINS Realistic
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"People will do far more to Avoid Pain than they will to Seek Pleasure."
When I craft a villain, I go out of my way to make darned sure that my fictional villains are as realistic as the villains we face in real life.
How do I do that? I give them feelings, motives, and emotional issues.
Human predators, villains (fictional and non-fictional) always have a reason that drives them to be villainous. Even mass murderers have reasons (however twisted) for doing what they do. NO villainous action is RANDOM. The victim may be randomly chosen, but the villain’s actions always have a reason, and that reason is driven by a very human issue caused by an unfulfilled and essential human need.
Key Human Issues:
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• Connection
• Loss
• Rejection
• Recognition & Attention
• Ridicule & Embarrassment
• Approval
• Control
“Is there a specific pattern to how a human predator operates?”
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YES, there is!
Let’s begin with a list of the most common personality traits found in your average psychopath:
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• Glib and superficial
• Egocentric and grandiose
• Lacking in remorse or guilt
• Deceitful & manipulative
• Impulsive
• Thrill-seeking
• Lacking responsibility
• Emotionally shallow
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From Predicting Violent Behavior by Psychiatrist John Monahan
Most people have a few of the above traits in lesser or greater degree, however the key trait necessary for a true human predator is “Lacking in remorse or guilt.” True predators have no compunction about what they do, or to whom they do it.
Choosing a Victim
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When a predator chooses his prospective victim, four questions go through his mind:
Do I feel Justified in using violence?
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It can be as simple as feeling that they have been provoked, as an act of revenge, to as complicated as looking for an excuse to start an argument to validate an angry response.
The truly dangerous predators do what they do because they WANT to. In fact, justification for their actions usually comes after they’ve already chosen their victim.
Are there Alternative ways to get what I’m really after?
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Seduction, and manipulation into being given what they’re actually after is usually the first technique they try. Violence is normally a technique of last resort, unless committing an act of violence is their actual goal.
Can I deal with the Consequences of my actions?
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Can they successfully hide the evidence of their deeds? Do they have support from others, such as in a mob scene or a gang situation, where everyone around them is committing violence too?
Do I have the Ability / Opportunity to commit this act?
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Do they believe they can successfully carry out the deed?
Once a predator feels that he has satisfactory answers to these four questions the next steps are among these…
Manipulating the Victim into being Vicimized
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• Forced Teaming
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This is the projection of a shared purpose or experience where none exists. It is a sophisticated manipulation technique for establishing false trust, using a “we’re all in the same boat together” attitude. “Both of us…”; “We’re some team…”; “How are we going to handle this one?”; “Now we’ve done it…” The most effective style of this technique plays on the victim’s sympathy and makes the victim WANT to participate. “You’d do the same for me.”
This is very difficult to rebuff without being rude -- which is precisely why they do it.
• Charm & Niceness
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Charm (verb) and Niceness are manipulation techniques used to compel, and/or control through allure or attraction. A smile is the Number One most typical disguise used to mask emotions, and intent.
These two techniques are used specifically to gain much of the information they will need to evaluate and then control their prospective victim.
• Mindless Chatter
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This is a manipulation technique a predator uses to convince their victim that they are harmless and someone the victim knows. They overwhelm their victim with nonsense chatter, in order to get physically closer.
• Typecasting
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This is a manipulation technique where the predator labels their victim in a slightly negative manner. “You’re probably too rich, too pretty, too important, too proud, too much of a snob to talk to me.” This induces the victim into acting the opposite just to prove them wrong -- and placing themselves right into the predator's hands.
• Loan Sharking
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A manipulation technique where the predator deliberately does the victim a favor specifically to place the victim in their debt. “Let me help you.”
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The proctor buys a pupil ices
And hopes the boy will not resist,
When he attempts to practice vices
Few people even know exist.
~ Edward Gorey ~
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• The Unsolicited Promise
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A manipulation technique designed to convince the victim that they are trustworthy. “I’ll just walk you to your doorstep and leave, I promise.” “I won’t hurt you, I promise.”
• Discounting the word “No.”
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When this word is spoken by the victim, the predator’s immediate response is to use every manipulation technique in their arsenal to convince the victim in that they don’t really mean “no”, up to and including, ignoring the word outright. This is to gain back their momentary loss of control over the victim’s actions.
A predator may use only a few of these techniques or all of them, but the target result is to manipulate their victim into a corner which the victim feels they cannot escape -- such as inside the victim’s home.
Sympathy for the Devil…
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“Murder your Darlings!” ~ Hemmingway
As far as I'm concerned the author SHOULD sympathize with the villain, that's how you GET true depth of character - truth in their characterization, actions and speech - but the Viewpoint Character and the Reader, should NOT sympathize with the villain too much, unless you intend to redeem the villain, or cause massive angst to your main character – and your readers.
Fair Warning: Too much sympathy for the villain drives the reader to think that you intend to save him - and they get royally pissed when you knock him off.
It has happened to me!
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My test readers totally misread a story I was in the process of crafting and assumed that the Villain was the Hero! Because of this, they vehemently protested his upcoming demise! To satisfy my readers I had to cut the whole second half of the book off and write that villain a whole new story where he WAS the hero. When I rewrote my original story, I had learned my lesson. NO ONE complained when I killed the villain that time.
Under normal circumstances, if I accidentally craft a Redeemable villain, but redemption does not serve the plot - I DON'T save him, I rework him to be less sympathetic, and then I kill his butt to serve the plot and the premise. To me STORY comes first.
But, if I really, REALLY like this character and want to save him regardless of the story in progress, I do save him – in a Whole Different Story. I leave his character intact but change his name, tweak his history and then craft a whole New story around him to do just that - redeem the villain.
The Villain’s Point of View?
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HELL NO! ~ Don't Kill the Thrill ~ Damn it!
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I never, ever, EVER put my villain's Point of View into a story.
Why Not? It gives away the punch-line before the joke is done. The villain’s POV KILLS the surprise because the reader already knows what’s going on, so where’s the surprise?
I want my readers to be as surprised as the viewpoint character when they get to the end of the story and finally discover why the Villain did all those dastardly deeds.
The villain's POV has a tendency to reveal too much, such as their MOTIVES, and answers too many questions that ruin the Mystery for the reader, such as "Why is this happening?"
There are a number of NYT bestseller Suspense authors that hide the Villain's more revealing information by cutting the reader off as soon as the Villain has an interesting thought or view.
They’re CHEATING using a rather nasty technique known as "Illegitimate Third Person POV", something actual Mystery writers wouldn’t be caught dead doing.
However, I suppose such poor suspense techniques are to be expected from Suspense novels as they are technically mystery-flavored novels, the way Futuristics have usually very poor world-building as they are Science-Fiction-flavored, not true Science-Fiction.
What is "Illegitimate Third Person POV"?
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When the "Point of View" is done correctly, whatever that viewpoint character knows, the Reader knows. EVERYTHING that is in the POV character's head is revealed as it is seen and felt. If that POV character looks at it, then the Reader should see it too, if that POV character thinks it, then the Reader should be aware of it -- that includes SECRETS!
"Illegitimate Third Person POV" is when everything EXCEPT those secrets are revealed. It's "illegitimate" because the Reader is cheated out of learning what they need to know to solve the story.
On a personal note, I refuse to read books or stories written with "Illegitimate Third Person POV", because if "I" can white a story without cheating, THEY CAN TOO! (Freaking lazy-butt writers... Grumble, grumble, grumble…)
"But I thought... the Villain's POV
Increases the Suspense?"
Um…No. The Villain’s POV KILLS the Suspense.
Why? Because suspense may be generated by the reader knowing that the main viewpoint character is in extreme danger (when the POV character doesn't,) but it totally KILLS the Impact when the main viewpoint character finds out how much danger they are actually in.
It’s like someone whispering, “I’m gonna yell ‘boo’ in that kid’s ear.”
When you see the kid jump, you might grin, but did YOU jump? No. Why not? Because you weren’t surprised.
If someone yells “BOO!” in the ear of the guy sitting next to you without warning, do you jump then? Yes. See?
The REAL way to keep suspense going is to present CLUES about the villain and his nefarious plans to the main POV character - and the reader - through behavior and dialogue cues. This lets the Reader feel that they are solving the mystery along side the main character.
"But I need it for the Plot!"
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If the author can't write the story WITHOUT including the Villain's POV, then it’s very possible that there's a deeper more serious flaw in the story.
The Author has focused on the WRONG main character.
Instead of the Hero and/or Heroine in the lead, the Villain is leading the book. If the villain is leading the book, then it's time to rethink the plot. For example, rewrite the story so that the villain leads from beginning to end! I know LOTS of readers who love a good book from the villain’s POV!
In Conclusion…
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When one is writing Villains, one should know how Real villains think and act, but that doesn’t mean your Reader should know what’s going on in their heads. More than half the fun of a really good Villain, is guessing what they’ll do next!
My textbook for crafting realistic villains:
"The Gift of Fear" by Gavin DeBecker
http://www.cnn.com/books/beginnings.....t.of.fear.cnn/
Enjoy!
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DISCLAIMER: As with all advice, take what you can use and throw out the rest. As a multi-published author, I have been taught some fairly rigid rules on what is publishable and what is not. If my rather straight-laced (and occasionally snotty,) advice does not suit your creative style, by all means, IGNORE IT.
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Ookami Kasumi
http://ookami-kasumi.livejournal.com/
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Brian Jacques' Redwall series has a villain's POV. Is he doing it wrong?
I haven't read Redwall, but Tom Clancy uses "Illegitimate Third" ALL THE DAMNED TIME!
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-- You're welcome.
-- You're welcome.
Seems like useful advice. I've seen too many cases of villains who are just plain nuts.
Well, not many people are as anal-retentive or as obsessive-compulsive as I am about getting things RIGHT.
Would all this apply to a sidekick character? As in the case of a psycho tyrant/king, would it be a gaffe to use the top general's POV?
The side-kick character is usually the POV character.
-- However it that's the character who happens to be the real villain of the piece, then you might want to avoid using him to keep your plot-twists from coming unraveled before you're ready to expose them.
The idea is to keep the reader guessing at All Times.
-- However it that's the character who happens to be the real villain of the piece, then you might want to avoid using him to keep your plot-twists from coming unraveled before you're ready to expose them.
The idea is to keep the reader guessing at All Times.
Alright, thank you. The side-kick will not be the real villian, in fact he gets killd significantly before the end of the story, so that's all good.
By the way, some of your readers commented on the Redwall series, I think the approach Jacques uses works pretty well considering his target audience. I am currently reading a suspense novel by Ted Dekker and he does exactly what your saying in order to keep the reader guessing.
By the way, some of your readers commented on the Redwall series, I think the approach Jacques uses works pretty well considering his target audience. I am currently reading a suspense novel by Ted Dekker and he does exactly what your saying in order to keep the reader guessing.
I'm glad I could help!
"I am currently reading a suspense novel by Ted Dekker and he does exactly what your saying in order to keep the reader guessing."
Dekker uses Illegitimate Third POV? Thanks for the warning. One more author I won't bother to read... Do you see what I mean about being Cheated? It's like being teased, and not in a nice way.
"I am currently reading a suspense novel by Ted Dekker and he does exactly what your saying in order to keep the reader guessing."
Dekker uses Illegitimate Third POV? Thanks for the warning. One more author I won't bother to read... Do you see what I mean about being Cheated? It's like being teased, and not in a nice way.
NO NO NO! I'm sorry I should have been more clear! Dekker does not use Illegitimate Third Person. His novels are amazing, and you never know where the bad guy is.
OH! My mistake.
-- See what I mean about a story being much more fun when you Don't know who the villain is?
-- See what I mean about a story being much more fun when you Don't know who the villain is?
The side-kick character is usually the POV character.
-- However it that's the character who happens to be the real villain of the piece, then you might want to avoid using him to keep your plot-twists from coming unraveled before you're ready to expose them.
The idea is to keep the reader guessing at All Times.
-- However it that's the character who happens to be the real villain of the piece, then you might want to avoid using him to keep your plot-twists from coming unraveled before you're ready to expose them.
The idea is to keep the reader guessing at All Times.
I have been reading some of your postings at the advice of a friend. I've been meaning to get back into writing and need a muse or some form of motivation. I've enjoyed reading your guides.
I humbly suggest that you write a tip-sheet on the "Creation of a Hero". We studied this in English Media when I was in highschool and I found out that I had created a hero for some of my fanfictions using the correct method before I was taught how to do it.
In case you're wondering what I am talking about, I am referring to the procedure of how a character is created and developed:
- of humble origins
- finds a calling
- meets a "wise man" to teach him the way
- has a villian
- has a love interest
- the "confrontation"
- the "journey home"
I humbly suggest that you write a tip-sheet on the "Creation of a Hero". We studied this in English Media when I was in highschool and I found out that I had created a hero for some of my fanfictions using the correct method before I was taught how to do it.
In case you're wondering what I am talking about, I am referring to the procedure of how a character is created and developed:
- of humble origins
- finds a calling
- meets a "wise man" to teach him the way
- has a villian
- has a love interest
- the "confrontation"
- the "journey home"
"I humbly suggest that you write a tip-sheet on the "Creation of a Hero". ... I am referring to the procedure of how a character is created and developed:
- of humble origins
- finds a calling
- meets a "wise man" to teach him the way
- has a villian
- has a love interest
- the "confrontation"
- the "journey home"
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Ah! That's the Mythic Journey as codified by Joseph Campbell in his "Hero with a Thousand Faces".
Instead of using that list as a way to build a character, I use it as a Plot to build a whole story.
Go HERE for a full description of what I mean:
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1684146/
- of humble origins
- finds a calling
- meets a "wise man" to teach him the way
- has a villian
- has a love interest
- the "confrontation"
- the "journey home"
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Ah! That's the Mythic Journey as codified by Joseph Campbell in his "Hero with a Thousand Faces".
Instead of using that list as a way to build a character, I use it as a Plot to build a whole story.
Go HERE for a full description of what I mean:
http://www.furaffinity.net/view/1684146/
Ah, yes that's actually what I meant. XD
I used to write fanfics and told the story of this dude, who did this and that yadda, you don't need the whole story. A few years later, in that class, I realized that I'd written his story as the "Mythical Journey" before even learning how.
I've got a basic layout of the main characters on my Journal if you're interested in peeking at it. And feel free to POKE at it. I could use some critique.
I used to write fanfics and told the story of this dude, who did this and that yadda, you don't need the whole story. A few years later, in that class, I realized that I'd written his story as the "Mythical Journey" before even learning how.
I've got a basic layout of the main characters on my Journal if you're interested in peeking at it. And feel free to POKE at it. I could use some critique.
"I used to write fanfics and told the story of this dude... A few years later, in that class, I realized that I'd written his story as the "Mythical Journey" before even learning how."
You probably absorbed the pattern straight from the books you read and the movies you watched as a kid. For example, the movies Star Wars, Eregon, and the Lion King follow that pattern.
The Mythic Journey is the most foundational (and instinctual) story pattern there is. It resonates in the human psyche more strongly than any other pattern. Because of this, a story without this patterns feels...wrong. You simply followed your Psyche.
"...I could use some critique?"
I don't do critiques sweety. I'm a professional author. I don't want to take the chance that I might accidentally absorb your story into my writing.
You probably absorbed the pattern straight from the books you read and the movies you watched as a kid. For example, the movies Star Wars, Eregon, and the Lion King follow that pattern.
The Mythic Journey is the most foundational (and instinctual) story pattern there is. It resonates in the human psyche more strongly than any other pattern. Because of this, a story without this patterns feels...wrong. You simply followed your Psyche.
"...I could use some critique?"
I don't do critiques sweety. I'm a professional author. I don't want to take the chance that I might accidentally absorb your story into my writing.
Actually, funny you should say that. For class, we had to watch a movie and write an essay explaining the "Mythical Journey". There were movies like "The Last Starfighter" and "Star Wars" on the list. I did "The Mask of Zorro".
Thanks again!
Thanks again!
If you're seriously interested in how the Mythic Journey works in fiction, get:
The Writer's Journey
Mythic Structure for Writers
by Christopher Vogler
http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/t.....s&n=507846
The Writer's Journey
Mythic Structure for Writers
by Christopher Vogler
http://www.amazon.com/exec/obidos/t.....s&n=507846
I'm a little late to the party, but I was recently re-reading your tips in hopes of getting over writers block. A book that came to my mind is "Soon I will be Invincible" which is kind of an interesting case, as it tells a typical superhero story from both the Hero and the villain POV. However, it's not quite a "villain POV" in the sense you're talking about, as the "villain" is very much a protagonist (arguably THE protagonist, as the title refers to him alone) and the story isn't about "hero vs villain" as much as it' about origins. The premise of the story revolves around origin stories and how exactly people end up embroiled in these wacky superhero stories.
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