In first impression I thought this was an ordinary vn when I found it but after reading though it i am shocked how good it is if I were to rate it,it will be a 10/10 one the best ones I ever read and with a heartwarming ending and I am excited for their next project if there is one. =)
I just finished reading and I gotta say I'm sad to see that its over. The ending was so sweet. This VN was pretty deep and emotional at times and I really liked the characters a lot. The 2 choices at the end of the phone call with dad especially, held SOO much weight to it. I just sat there staring at the screen for 5 min unsure what to click. Imma miss my Brucey, Drayden and everyone needs someone like Redline or Buckey in their life. Sad to see them go.
It’s been such a nice ride ^^
I’m so happy to see the end of this beautiful story and also sad that we won’t see our boys again in another round.
Haters that used to plague this project be damned! They will not see how fulfilling experience it become. It’s us who will remember and spread the word and love to the world!
Thank you Leo <3
It was a short, but awesome novel for me. While reading, I felt both sorrow and happiness, both anger and enthusiasm. I felt what the characters felt at that moment and I was always eager to find out what would come next. I'm truly grateful for ur team and ur job. U did everything perfectly. I absolutely loved the ending and happy that everything ended like that. ^w^
I don't know how to express how I feel about this Vn, but just wow, and to think that I followed the development from its first version and looked forward to the next update month after month, now that it's concluded I can say that it was worth the wait, and the ending, like almost every Fvn that ends, leaves me with a feeling of emptiness, you become attached to the characters and you would like to live more adventures with them but it left me with great satisfaction. Congratulations and thank you for this great work, I enjoyed it.
Wow... That was just.... Wow. Gut-wrenching and bittersweet at the same time. This VN was a wild ride, and I'm glad I stayed till the end. Like, damn, I'm not even into wrestling and all that stuff, but this thing just changed something in my head forever. Great work!
What a beautiful send-off in the end. Undefeated has so much heart in it, it’s really lovely. I’ve gotten teary-eyed multiple times over the course of this story. Redline is just the sweetest fighter ever. But really, all the character writing was really well done. Thanks for sharing this VN with us! >w<
I already gave this vn 5 stars a while ago so ill just leave a comment. Loved this vn, was hooked since the first round and the ending (whilst extremely violent xD) didn't disappoint 10/10 mwah
I love a happy ending. The stuck together through thick and thin and made it out alright. Though it has come to an end this vn will hold a special place in my heart. It may too much to ask but pls make a sequel of how they're spending their vacation at the beach house 🙏
The way you wrote the announcement on Discord scared the shit out of me, uncalled for lmfao
Here is my review!
I remember finding out about this game from the first update, and how instantly I became so hooked to the story! I remember thinking how interesting it was to find a VN about MMA, wondering how it would turn out. Color me surprised at how unexpectedly I saw this game become something SO GOOD. The writing is PEAK, the way it builds up suspense is the best because omg I could not help but be on the edge of my seat as the story kept rising to its climax. I enjoyed every second of this game, the worldbuilding is great, and the characters have SO much personality (I can't get over how well they were written). The overall story is something I never expected but was so very pleasantly surprised as I watched it unfold. Not to mention, the ending is so satisfying >:D
Thank you SO MUCH for creating and sharing this game for others to play! As well as Congrats on finishing it! It feels rare to see VNs get finished lmao.
The only thing I wanna critique is that I wish there was a bit more writing when it comes to the Commissioners’ motives. I felt it could’ve been a little more explained as to why he did what he did, because when it’s revealed, he just kind of seemed to be a villain just to be a villain (and a dick to everyone). But from the character’s perspective, I can see why it doesn’t really get explained.
That and it was a bit misleading (during the updates I mean) that it seemed like there were going to be routes, especially with that choice of interests. However, looking back on it I see how it was only a choice for different dialogue in that specific scene. I really don’t mind it being linear anyway, I loved how it turned out in the end for those three ;3
IMO, 8.5/10, such a good story.
Talking about the update itself... (spoilers)
OOH THE SUSPENSE GOT ME SO STRESSED, EVERYTHING KEPT BUILDING AND BUILDING UNTIL BOOM, THE GUY SOMEHOW FUCKING STABS HIMSELF LMAOOO
Also, why the fuck they got whole ass prison cells up in this bitch? THANK GOD FOR BUCKY, he definitely was the best one to beat the shit out of Cole, I wish they both beat him more but time was important lmao. My heart dropped when Red went missing tho, why did he meander his way out of bed the second he woke up lol, poor guy. And STILL, he gets talked down to when he finds his grandpa and Zander, I laughed when he said ‘fuck him up,’ AND OH BOY DID WE, GO ZANDER. SWEET SWEET REVENGE. Also, Theodore literally missed his shot from point-blank range… HOW? LIKE, I DIDN’T THINK HE WOULD SHOOT AT ALL, I GOT SO SCARED WHEN HE DID.
UGH, this game was so good. I WAS PRUMPING MY FISTS SO HARD WHEN THEY BECAME A THREEWAY RELATIONSHIP, THEY’RE ALL SO MEANT FOR EACH OTHER I LOVE IT. The ending couldn’t have been any more satisfying, I loved how it all turned out ;3;
I’m so looking forward to seeing what else is in store from the team ❤
This was the best visual novel I've ever played in my life the art was amazing and so was everything else in the game. Thank you for giving us the best experience ever.
im gonna say this but im really impressed about the ending. i though Zander will die when "the old man" is using knife on him. this game make me feel like watching an action movie and love story i guess. Kinda make me wonder what will happen to Ted(Theodore) even?
I know Redline's height and weight, but how big is Cole compared to Redline since he was put in there by the commissioner to fight him? He looks to be bigger than Bruce even.
Leo, I began reading this vn some weeks ago and I fell in love with the story, the setting , and the characters. I've only been reading about 10 to 20 minutes a day during the night because I'm really invested in the plot and I didn't want to just finish it all in a few hours.
SPOILER AHEAD, PLEASE DON'T KEEP READING IF YOU DON'T WANT TO GET SPOILED, I'M ABOUT TO DISCUSS IMPORTANT DETAILS OF THIS VN.
I got to the "fight" between Redline and Cole. And I gotta say this chapter seriously destroyed me, it's been a while since a piece of literature made me feel like this. I honestly kind of feel a bit resentful towards you because of the sheer brutality of the events, but I guess that's to be expected when you are a good writer and you manage to get your readers so attached to certain characters. So first of all, congratulations and secondly, since I've stopped reading I just need to know, a simple yes coming from you regarding this issue would mean the world to me.
Are you planning on making both the Commissioner and Cole suffer more or as much as Redline has suffered?
I guess them getting away would be realistic considering the world we live in where bad people get away with doing awful shit all the time, but my mental health craves revenge for poor Redline, Zander and Bruce.
And congratulations once again, if you happen to read this, even if you don't answer, I want to tell you, once again, that your visual novel is fantastic. Take care and I'm looking forward to reading more.
what a cool visual novel!! I started reading a couple of days ago, when the update came out, after seeing it on twitter. Thanks for putting it all together !! :D
← Return to game
Comments
Log in with itch.io to leave a comment.
I LOVE THIS VN SO MUCH IT DESERVES A MILLION STARS IT WAS BEAUTIFUL I CANT EVEN COMPREHEND IT ANYMORE AAAAAAAAAAAAAH
wrote a longish review on my website, in case anyone is interested: https://purkka.fi/fvn_recs.html#undefeated
Didnt know i've been needed Redline bf in my life, but here i am
In first impression I thought this was an ordinary vn when I found it but after reading though it i am shocked how good it is if I were to rate it,it will be a 10/10 one the best ones I ever read and with a heartwarming ending and I am excited for their next project if there is one. =)
That was an amazing read, wow! Didn't really know what to expect when I found this but I'm so glad I decided to give it a go. So so so good!
Thanks to the author and to everyone else that made this VN possible, it was truly a delight to read.
What weird lazy detailing on the end...
I kinda aggree on this, the ending could have been better..
i love this so so so so so so so so so much
im gonna miss this so bad 💖💖
Congratulations on completion. What a ride that was.
Are there routes? Like for Drayden, Bucky and Redline. I ask because of the options for hanging out and all that.
nope. it's a linear story.
I just finished reading and I gotta say I'm sad to see that its over. The ending was so sweet. This VN was pretty deep and emotional at times and I really liked the characters a lot. The 2 choices at the end of the phone call with dad especially, held SOO much weight to it. I just sat there staring at the screen for 5 min unsure what to click. Imma miss my Brucey, Drayden and everyone needs someone like Redline or Buckey in their life. Sad to see them go.
This VN is as solid as Bruces Jaw! 5 stars!
It’s been such a nice ride ^^ I’m so happy to see the end of this beautiful story and also sad that we won’t see our boys again in another round. Haters that used to plague this project be damned! They will not see how fulfilling experience it become. It’s us who will remember and spread the word and love to the world! Thank you Leo <3
It was a short, but awesome novel for me. While reading, I felt both sorrow and happiness, both anger and enthusiasm. I felt what the characters felt at that moment and I was always eager to find out what would come next. I'm truly grateful for ur team and ur job. U did everything perfectly. I absolutely loved the ending and happy that everything ended like that. ^w^
PS. The commissioner is an a**h**e.
damn what happened?
Well, it's up to you to find out. :3
I don't know how to express how I feel about this Vn, but just wow, and to think that I followed the development from its first version and looked forward to the next update month after month, now that it's concluded I can say that it was worth the wait, and the ending, like almost every Fvn that ends, leaves me with a feeling of emptiness, you become attached to the characters and you would like to live more adventures with them but it left me with great satisfaction. Congratulations and thank you for this great work, I enjoyed it.
Unngggg....The ending was so sweet I was tearing up the whole time ;-;
I'm so happy I got to experience this VN, and thanks so much for making it. I enjoyed every second of this!
Wow... That was just.... Wow. Gut-wrenching and bittersweet at the same time. This VN was a wild ride, and I'm glad I stayed till the end. Like, damn, I'm not even into wrestling and all that stuff, but this thing just changed something in my head forever. Great work!
That was the very best ending one could make with that story. Hat off to you, for you made the kind of character I couldn't help but root for.
What a beautiful send-off in the end. Undefeated has so much heart in it, it’s really lovely. I’ve gotten teary-eyed multiple times over the course of this story. Redline is just the sweetest fighter ever. But really, all the character writing was really well done. Thanks for sharing this VN with us! >w<
I already gave this vn 5 stars a while ago so ill just leave a comment. Loved this vn, was hooked since the first round and the ending (whilst extremely violent xD) didn't disappoint 10/10 mwah
Fantastic game
Leo can we ever get a sequel to this one, please
I loved it🙌
I love a happy ending. The stuck together through thick and thin and made it out alright. Though it has come to an end this vn will hold a special place in my heart. It may too much to ask but pls make a sequel of how they're spending their vacation at the beach house 🙏
love this novel I wonder what if all characters show up in new project like supporting characters help main?
Just finished. LOVED. I'll miss this bunch
The way you wrote the announcement on Discord scared the shit out of me, uncalled for lmfao
Here is my review!
I remember finding out about this game from the first update, and how instantly I became so hooked to the story! I remember thinking how interesting it was to find a VN about MMA, wondering how it would turn out. Color me surprised at how unexpectedly I saw this game become something SO GOOD. The writing is PEAK, the way it builds up suspense is the best because omg I could not help but be on the edge of my seat as the story kept rising to its climax. I enjoyed every second of this game, the worldbuilding is great, and the characters have SO much personality (I can't get over how well they were written). The overall story is something I never expected but was so very pleasantly surprised as I watched it unfold. Not to mention, the ending is so satisfying >:D Thank you SO MUCH for creating and sharing this game for others to play! As well as Congrats on finishing it! It feels rare to see VNs get finished lmao.The only thing I wanna critique is that I wish there was a bit more writing when it comes to the Commissioners’ motives. I felt it could’ve been a little more explained as to why he did what he did, because when it’s revealed, he just kind of seemed to be a villain just to be a villain (and a dick to everyone). But from the character’s perspective, I can see why it doesn’t really get explained. That and it was a bit misleading (during the updates I mean) that it seemed like there were going to be routes, especially with that choice of interests. However, looking back on it I see how it was only a choice for different dialogue in that specific scene. I really don’t mind it being linear anyway, I loved how it turned out in the end for those three ;3
IMO, 8.5/10, such a good story.
Talking about the update itself... (spoilers)
OOH THE SUSPENSE GOT ME SO STRESSED, EVERYTHING KEPT BUILDING AND BUILDING UNTIL BOOM, THE GUY SOMEHOW FUCKING STABS HIMSELF LMAOOOAlso, why the fuck they got whole ass prison cells up in this bitch? THANK GOD FOR BUCKY, he definitely was the best one to beat the shit out of Cole, I wish they both beat him more but time was important lmao. My heart dropped when Red went missing tho, why did he meander his way out of bed the second he woke up lol, poor guy. And STILL, he gets talked down to when he finds his grandpa and Zander, I laughed when he said ‘fuck him up,’ AND OH BOY DID WE, GO ZANDER. SWEET SWEET REVENGE. Also, Theodore literally missed his shot from point-blank range… HOW? LIKE, I DIDN’T THINK HE WOULD SHOOT AT ALL, I GOT SO SCARED WHEN HE DID.
UGH, this game was so good. I WAS PRUMPING MY FISTS SO HARD WHEN THEY BECAME A THREEWAY RELATIONSHIP, THEY’RE ALL SO MEANT FOR EACH OTHER I LOVE IT. The ending couldn’t have been any more satisfying, I loved how it all turned out ;3;
I’m so looking forward to seeing what else is in store from the team ❤
This was the best visual novel I've ever played in my life the art was amazing and so was everything else in the game. Thank you for giving us the best experience ever.
Thank you, everyone. 🐶💚
NO, THANK YOU!!
im gonna say this but im really impressed about the ending. i though Zander will die when "the old man" is using knife on him. this game make me feel like watching an action movie and love story i guess. Kinda make me wonder what will happen to Ted(Theodore) even?
I know Redline's height and weight, but how big is Cole compared to Redline since he was put in there by the commissioner to fight him? He looks to be bigger than Bruce even.
Pretty sure Cole is around Bruce's height
Cole is the same height as Bruce (measured without ears or horns), and a little bit heavier.
There will be not a good ending right?
Can't wait to start reading this. Quick question, is this NSFW?
Undefeated is not safe for work, but it features no sex scenes.
So not nsfw?
Just out of pure curiosity, how much of the story has currently been written? Are we about half way through, or are we approaching the climax soon?
Edit:
Nvm, I'm so fucking stupid. Next builds gonna be the last.
*facepalm*
Leo, I began reading this vn some weeks ago and I fell in love with the story, the setting , and the characters. I've only been reading about 10 to 20 minutes a day during the night because I'm really invested in the plot and I didn't want to just finish it all in a few hours.
SPOILER AHEAD, PLEASE DON'T KEEP READING IF YOU DON'T WANT TO GET SPOILED, I'M ABOUT TO DISCUSS IMPORTANT DETAILS OF THIS VN.
I got to the "fight" between Redline and Cole. And I gotta say this chapter seriously destroyed me, it's been a while since a piece of literature made me feel like this. I honestly kind of feel a bit resentful towards you because of the sheer brutality of the events, but I guess that's to be expected when you are a good writer and you manage to get your readers so attached to certain characters. So first of all, congratulations and secondly, since I've stopped reading I just need to know, a simple yes coming from you regarding this issue would mean the world to me.
Are you planning on making both the Commissioner and Cole suffer more or as much as Redline has suffered?
I guess them getting away would be realistic considering the world we live in where bad people get away with doing awful shit all the time, but my mental health craves revenge for poor Redline, Zander and Bruce.
And congratulations once again, if you happen to read this, even if you don't answer, I want to tell you, once again, that your visual novel is fantastic. Take care and I'm looking forward to reading more.
i cant wait for the next one I'm so mad right now after HIM you know what I'm referring when i say HIM
Right ... i want HIS head in HIS ass
Real shit. Kill him off. And the other one, though if my memory's correct he got fired
One of the best fucking visual novels I've ever read. Seriously this is top tier wtf
The last chapter broke my heart. Looking forward to round 8, can’t wait to find some time to dive in.
pity party persecution fantasy
what a cool visual novel!! I started reading a couple of days ago, when the update came out, after seeing it on twitter. Thanks for putting it all together !! :D