I remember reading the original demo that you had on dashingdon, and I am glad that I found this on my feed page. I can't wait to reread the demo, and I also can't wait for the full release of this too.
You cannot end chapter ten the way that ypu did. It was getting so good that I didn't want it to end, and I can't wait for the next chapter. I basically read the entire thing in one setting.
At the end after we met your master, where it said that he smacked our head with something, there's an error just after the part that basically says since the sun is setting, we are ready to hit the hay. The only criticism I have is the lack of a page that states 'hey this is the end of the demo.' I thought something went wrong on your end, like something in thw code was typed in wrong. I wouldn't have know that was the end of the demo if I didn't went to the comments. Other than that I did like what I had read though.
I don't know if you're going to update this, but what I read is good. I like the premise of the story, and can't wait to read what happens next. I did not want what we gotten to stop.
I just finished the demo, and I didn't want it to end at all. I had a feeling something was going to happen towards the end, and I was right. I cant wait to read more of it.
I didn't know that it got updated until I saw some asks on your Tumblr that caused me to check to see if it got updated. Holy crap, I didn't want the current chapter to end. So I can't wait for the following Friday for chapter four to be released.
Since there no way to minimize the side menu when I try to read it on my phone, the left side of what you have written is cut through by the side of the menu. If that makes sense. It's the only way I can explain it.
I read this, and itvleftvme wanting more. I can't wait for whenever you can update this. The concept, and the story seems interesting, so kepp up the good work.
For me the font color is like an off white, and is almost blending in with the white background. There's nothing stopping me from reading this when I can get to the library with my laptop, so there's no rush. I just need to take into consideration that I'm having troubles with my cellphone provider ever sense they switched to a 5G network earlier this year. Things are probably not loading correctly because of it.
The one thing critique I would give it, is that the background is not mobile friendly with how similar the font color is to it. It could be just my phone not wanting to completely load everything. Don't get me wrong, I'm still trying to read it by highlighting the words, but with bad eyes it's hard to read. Maybe have an option to switch to a dark mode, or darken the font a bit, if it is possible. I will refresh my phone to see if anything loads more.
