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I was not expecting it to be good.
It had a very interesting atmosphere to it. I usually don't like linear stories that have no or minimal choices, but I really liked this (oops, only now just noticed choices won't be implemented until later chapters. I'm excited for those!).
I'm not a fan of AI art, I was really iffy about checking this story out because of it. However, after reading, I feel with the setting of the world, you are using it to tell a story that can only best be told if using AI artwork. 
I also really liked the music! That's not AI? You did good!

There are a lot of typos though. Grammar and spelling.  At least there was in the first part, where the protagonist meets Sam in his world and walks with him. Once they reached the cabin, I stopped noticing it because I was too interested in the atmosphere and setting.

I adore Sam so much. Like, he obviously feels very guilty for luring the protagonist into this strange reality, and is trying to make up for it by cooking and providing for him however way he can. It's explained in dialogue, but even without that dialogue you can tell his actions were driven by loneliness and a desire to keep a new potential friend, and the guilt of bringing him there. I'm also interested in this internal struggle he has, where he wants to leave but can't bring himself to enter these foreign worlds he encounters. I feel most of the inhabitants of this ever changing limbo probably feel the safe way.

I read the comment by Naho. Honestly, it seems to me they didn't pay attention to or read the story at all. The animations were not "distracting" either, at least not for me. Of course, lots of people have things like ADHD or other conditions that make it hard to focus, so I could see how the animations might bother some people.  I would not say the animations are "overused", I feel they highlight and attribute to the feel of the setting.

It IS weird though, that you have no idea what an isekai is though LOL.
Isekai is a fantasy subgenre where a character is transported (or reincarnated) into a fantasy world. The protagonist of Interloper walks down a road and enters a different reality. This, by its briefest definition, makes it an isekai.
I will point out, there is more to the genre than that, as many would consider true isekai has more factors to consider that make them such. True isekai heavily involve the protagonist making use of their knowledge of their prior world, and typically the story focuses on the culture and technology of the protagonists new world.  Anything less is just the isakai trope being used to jumpstart a story.
Is your story an isekai? Maybe. I would argue it probably is. But only by it's most basic and simple definition, "Character is transported into a different world". There is no need to follow any of the common story formats used by the genre and trope, as your story is too different from the typical isekai to use them.
Just keep doing what you are doing. It is good.

Honestly, I think the story was formatted well, the "suspension of disbelief" you mentioned, I could easily understand what was going on and felt it was done very well. Naho just has no reading comprehension (No offence Naho. But you pretty clearly let your biases cloud your thinking) The only thing I can tell you actually need to work on right now is your grammar. Many sentences read like they are missing words, and there were quite a few spelling mistakes (at least in the first part of the story). And that all would be easily fixed by downloading and using the free version of Grammarly.

I will be waiting for the next chapter.

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I was not expecting it to be good.

It was a very interesting atmosphere to it. I usually don't like linear stories that have no or minimal choices, but I really liked this (oops, only now just noticed choices won't be implemented until later chapters. I'm excited for those!).

- Interesting. I'm glad it didn't disappoint. Yes, we'll see about that :)

I'm not a fan of AI art, I was really iffy about checking this story out because of it. However, after reading, I feel with the setting of the world, you are using it to tell a story that can only best be told if using AI artwork.

- I'm waking up to this - the fact that people are more averse to AI than I initially thought. I'm pleased you can see what I can see here - that this story is in a symbiotic relationship with AI, rather than hindered by it.

I also really liked the music! That's not AI? You did good!

- This is what I hope people will appreciate. The music, and the feelings I'm trying to create. The emotional world-building. Music is the art form I'm most at home in. If I can make someone else feel something similar to what I feel, that is my highest aspiration. Thank you :)

There are a lot of typos though. Grammar and spelling.  At least there was in the first part, where the protagonist meets Sam in his world and walks with him. Once they reached the cabin, I stopped noticing it because I was too interested in the atmosphere and setting.

- I know. Far more than I thought. I'm an amateur, after all. Being from a non English-speaking country doesn't help. I have taken this to heart, and am now using Grammarly - thanks for that. It was silly of me to think It'd be fine without any form of spellcheck. (Ren Py does not have any). I am correcting the text today, and finding LOTS of typos, missing words, and learning some things about grammar. For one thing, In my language, we use commas a lot. More than in English, as it turns out.


It IS weird though, that you have no idea what an isekai is though LOL.

Isekai is a fantasy subgenre where a character is transported (or reincarnated) into a fantasy world. The protagonist of Interloper walks down a road and enters a different reality. This, by its briefest definition, makes it an isekai.

- I have always just sort of done my own thing.

This is an oversight of mine, as I have not educated myself about this concept. I've always been uninterested in trends, or in being defined by subcultures. I never really felt I fit in any of the boxes. In this case it sounds like I'm literally writing something a bit like an Isekai, while being ignorant about the concept. The thing is, I don't think it will harm the story. I am unbound by the tropes or typical story motifs, since I don't know about them. Will I be making some banal mistakes that could have been avoided if I had taken a more informed approach? Yeah probably. But I think - I hope - I'll also bring something else to the table.

Honestly, I think the story was formatted well, the "suspension of disbelief" you mentioned, I could easily understand what was going on and felt it was done very well.

- I used to write when I was a child. I enjoyed it quite a bit. I haven't written in over a decade, so it's fun to do it again. I'm glad you felt it was worth your time :)

I can't say exactly when the next chapter will be, and I will probably take a bit more time with things. Thank you for your kind words, they are much appreciated.