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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to take this to FAC and make it earn the bronze star.
Thanks, Ippantekina (talk) 09:48, 5 November 2024 (UTC)
Adding a placeholder. Ceoil (talk) 21:07, 14 November 2024 (UTC)
I have added this article to the FAC PR review sidebar. Please consider reviewing articles listed there. Z1720 (talk) 03:08, 30 November 2024 (UTC)
Aoba47
[edit]- For this part, (Sounwave, Jahaan Sweet, and Keanu Beats shared credits on two tracks), I think that it would be helpful to clarify that this means production credits or something along those lines. I was a bit confused when I first read this part, as I was not sure what these credits referenced. I can understand wanting to avoid any unnecessary repetition as "produced" is used later in the same sentence, but I think clarity here would be more important than that.
- For this part, (and Aaron Dessner produced additional songs), why not include the exact number of songs he produced? It also seems that Sounwave produced one of these additional songs. Is this notable enough to mention in the lead as well (as the lead currently only mentions Sounwave's work for the standard edition)? It may be too trivial or specific, but I still wanted to ask since the lead focuses a lot on who produced what for the album.
- I am not sure the quotation marks are needed for this part, (to an "alternative"–leaning musician). Also, is there a clearer definition of what "alternative" is referencing in this context? A wiki-link may help here with that.
- This may be me just being super nitpick-y so apologies in advance, but for this part, (Jack Antonoff, who had produced all of Swift's albums starting with), I wonder if co-produced would be a better word choice or changing it to produced songs for all of Swift's albums instead. The current wording could read that Antonoff was the sole producer for all of those albums, which is not the case.
- Why is Joe Alwyn's nationality included in his descriptor? I can understand why hip-hop is used to describe the producers as it provides context for the reader, but I do not really see the necessity for including Alwyn's nationality here, especially when it is not done for any of the other people in that section, such as Zoë Kravitz or Lana Del Rey. It just comes off as random.
- I wonder if more context could be added to this part, (but it also contains cryptic lyrical details that allude to her personal life and public image), as Swift has left these kinds of clues for her fans to discuss and speculate on in her past music. It just feels like this part is missing, particularly since Swift's connection with her fans is well-documented and researched. Did any of the coverage for this album bring this up?
I hope that these comments are helpful so far. I do not notice anything major, and I am primarily pointing out more minor nitpicks. My review is up to the "Production and music" section. I actually have not listened to this album in full, but I do really enjoy "You're on Your Own, Kid", which I randomly enough first heard in a fan-made video for The Real Housewives of Atlanta. Best of luck with this peer review. Aoba47 (talk) 03:03, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
- While I do understand that repetition can be inevitable at points, I would still look through the first paragraph of the "Production and music" section as it does make multiple sentences with "co-produced" being used in a similar way. Again, I get that repetition is just going to happen when it comes to discussing things like this, but it is noticeable and detracts from the prose when it is over-used.
- I am confused with the sample discussion for "Karma". From my understanding, a sample is when a song adapts something from a pre-existing song. I looked at the citation and it says that Keanu Beats made the sample in 2019, but what does sample mean in this context? Did Beats create a sample and then this was sent to Swift? If so, what did Beats sample in the first place. This is made even more confusing as the sample is not mentioned in either the track listing in this article and the "Karma" article.
- This is another nitpick-y, but I do not think "flickering" makes sense in this context, (holding the flickering flame of a lighter). The cover is a static image so there is no indication that the flame is in fact flickering. It is not supported in the citation either.
- For this part, (embarked on the Eras Tour, a concert tour that she described as), I am not sure the "concert tour" description is needed as I would believe most readers would already know that. It could be shorted to something like ", which she described as".
- Shouldn't it be noted that "You're Losing Me" is available on streaming and is no longer limited to concert-exclusive merchandise?
- I was about confused by this part, (and the positive public image she had curated since her 2017 album Reputation), as Swift has obviously been creating a positive public image before this album. I looked at the source, which more so focuses on how Swift was able to turn around negative publicity with Reputation, and I do not think that matches what is said in this article.
That should be it for me. Apologies again for posting my comments in the wrong place. I hope that everything is going well with you, and great work with the article as always. Aoba47 (talk) 16:25, 5 December 2024 (UTC)