User:RAHB/WhisperJudge

Let the judgery commence!

User:Guildensternenstein/Buffalo, New York

Humour:	3	As any Guildy article eventually becomes, I'm sure this will be a veritable cornucopia of humor once it's completed. Unfortunately, I must judge it in its unfinished state, and I wasn't very amused.
Concept:	5	Straight-forward article about a city.
Prose and formatting:	10	As is typical, Guildy's prose is just fine.
Images:	0	No images.
Miscellaneous:	1	For incompletion.
Final Score:	19	Obviously not a very good review, but the article isn't finished. Go ahead and keep working on it, I'm sure it'll be better than any of the town-cruft we've got lying around now.
Reviewer:	RA HB 08:46, October 7, 2010 (UTC)

Humour:	7	I very much like the tone of the narrator and the overall concept, a very absurd one that grabs me nicely. I find it funny but I always hate when articles have the part where the regal-sounding host speaks directly to the reader, telling them what they're doing outloud. I realize it's necessary to continue the narration, but I've seen a lot of it, (even written a feature with it a few years back that I don't particularly like anymore). At any rate, the parts aside from that bit are very funny.
Concept:	7	The serial killer thing isn't the most original thing in the world, but I like the way the concept was executed.
Prose and formatting:	8	Perfect other than one or two typos.
Images:	7	I like the images. I think they compliment the tone of the article well in a way.
Miscellaneous:	7	Averaged out the other scores.
Final Score:	36	My guess is inspired by EMC and written by Dexter. At any rate, another pretty good article.
Reviewer:	-RA HB 08:57, October 7, 2010 (UTC)

Humour:	8	Well done. I actually like the slight missteps with the language here and there. Makes it sound like this is really people from all of these countries debating this in English. Which of course makes me hear their wacky voices in my head.
Concept:	8	I'm sure I've seen a number of "arguing narrators" articles before, but I think this one was well-crafted and sincere.
Prose and formatting:	8	As I said in the humor comment, I don't think there's anything wrong with the grammar and syntax, because I think it adds to the flavor of the article. However, there are some tiny spelling errors that could be corrected, and the article would look much nicer without that glaring red link at the top. It could also maybe use an image.
Images:	5	I should probably be giving a zero for no images, but I see how it would be difficult to fit one in here, so a five it is, because I still think it could use one. Maybe a guy sitting at a typewriter or something. Or just the typewriter itself. Whatever works.
Miscellaneous:	7	Averaged out the scores.
Final Score:	36	Overall a delightful little read. Just needs some of the fixes I mentioned.
Reviewer:	-RA HB 09:08, October 7, 2010 (UTC)

Humour:	7	Well, this starts pretty well, and I was laughing quite a bit. But as the article continues on, it appears the author has gotten a little lazy and stopped using different jokes. The humor gets a little too dried out, and it starts to be merely an informative article. If you can keep the effort and tone more consistent I see a very funny overall article.
Concept:	8	I like the concept, dividing by zero and all that is pretty regular fare kind of stuff, but it's put out well here.
Prose and formatting:	7	There are a few places where the dialog gets a little smushed. Also, for the love of God, don't use the word "pwn."
Images:	5	No images, but as the review above, I can see how it would be hard to incorporate them. I'd still like to see at least one though.
Miscellaneous:	7	Meh.
Final Score:	34	Work on the things I said and you may have a shot at a feature.
Reviewer:	-RA HB 09:18, October 7, 2010 (UTC)

Humour:	5	Okay, I have no idea where this article is going. There's very little coherent connection between the sections/sentences, and the jokes are extremely overused (the French surrendering, wow, where have I heard that before?). Then the aliens come in out of nowhere. Man.
Concept:	4	I'm not really sure I even understand what the concept is. I don't see a punchline that's being worked towards, I don't see a unified theme, I don't see where the article is going. It seems more like an amalgamation of sentences merely relating to the topic (however vaguely). It seems there was very little research put in, and was probably punched out rather quickly.
Prose and formatting:	5	There are many punctuation, grammar, and spelling mistakes, and the page falls apart at the bottom. You've also signed the article (unnecessary), and put on some ugly red-linked categories.
Images:	4	The images are there, yes. But they seem to serve very little purpose to the article. And throwing Invader Zim in is hardly busting my gut.
Miscellaneous:	5
Final Score:	23	I don't want to discourage your writing endeavors, but this needs a lot of work. Feel free to ask me for help with writing any time if you're so inclined.
Reviewer:	-RA HB 09:26, October 7, 2010 (UTC)