Talk:Tim Foli/GA1

GA Reassessment

This article has been reviewed as part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/Project quality task force in an effort to ensure all listed Good articles continue to meet the Good article criteria. In reviewing the article, I have found there are a number of issues that need to be addressed.

• It is reasonably well written.

  a (prose): b (MoS):

The prose is not great, maybe a 4/10. It is too emotive and judgemental for encyclopedia standards and needs to be brought dback to NPOV standards. It is also shaky grammatically and there are a number of short paragraphs that need to be expanded.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

The lead does not do an adequate job of introducing Tim Foli - list some career highlights and notable things he has done to expand it a bit more.

Overview section is in the wrong place -put it at the end of the article, not the beginning.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

• It is factually accurate and verifiable.

  a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

Severe referencing problems, I have highlighted the worst ones with tags in the article.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

• It is broad in its coverage.

  a (major aspects): b (focused):

• It follows the neutral point of view policy.

  a (fair representation): b (all significant views):

"Foli was known as a fiery player who was a reliable fielder, but only an average hitter." - Unless this is a direct quote (in which case it must be sourced), this is an unreliable judgement in the very first sentence.

"Foli's dubious record", "His free swinging did not aim for the fences, however", "Foli hit well when it counted most" - all unsourced commentary in the first paragraph.

More examples of unsourced or unexplained commentary: "Foli posted decent numbers", "was a typical season for Foli", "as well as other intangibles, dropped from World Champions to mediocrity", "when his fiery personality made news." I haven't got them all, so do a thorough sweep through the article.

"At age seventeen, Foli started out poorly" - How so? explain.

• It is stable.

  

• It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.

  a (tagged and captioned): b (lack of images does not in itself exclude GA): c (non-free images have fair use rationales):

No images. They aren't essential, but would certainly improve the article substantially.--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

• Overall:

  a Pass/Fail:

I will check back in no less than seven days. If progress is being made, the article will remain listed as a Good article. Otherwise, it may be delisted (such a decision may be challenged through WP:GAR). If improved after it has been delisted, it may be nominated at WP:GAN again. Feel free to drop a message on my talk page if you have any questions, and many thanks for all the hard work that has gone into this article thus far. Regards--Jackyd101 (talk) 18:17, 7 October 2008 (UTC)

This has been up here for two weeks, notifications have been made and still no work. This is no longer a GA, I'm sorry.--Jackyd101 (talk) 15:41, 23 October 2008 (UTC)