Talk:Raya and the Last Dragon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, sure. Wingwatchers (talk) 00:12, 7 July 2021 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

All  Done

• The poster's non-free use rationale looks good.
• The alt text for the poster feels generic. Expand it.

•  Done

• Why do some billing credits have refs. and others don't?
• The same source is used for two credits in "story by". Why?
• Remove the Indonesia release date per WP:FILMRELEASE.

•  Done

• Is the citation to The Numbers needed if it's wrong?
• "impact towards" → "impact on"

•  Done

• "As of June 29, 2021" - why such a specific date?
• Add a serial comma after "story" (American English).

•  Done

Plot and cast

• At 587 words, the plot section passes WP:FILMPLOT.
• Add a serial comma after Tong.

•  Done

• That's it here. #Cast also looks good.

Production

All  Done

• "Moana, Frozen, Zootopia" → "Frozen (2013), Moana (2016), and Zootopia (2016)"

•  Done

• Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
• #Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
• "the film is untitled at the time" → "the film was untitled at the time"

•  Done

• This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
• "Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
• "Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" → "Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"

•  Done

• Put Blindspotting in italics and add "(2018)" in front of it.

•  Done

• "based off" - should this be written as "based on"?

•  Done

• "quippiness" - not a word.
• Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.

• Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?

•  Done

• We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering. This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.

•  Fixed (hopefully)

• "plot line" → "plotline"

•  Done

• "for why" - kinda wordy

•  Fixed

• Serial comma after "hair style".

•  Done

• "hair style" → "hairstyle"

•  Done

• "equipments" → "equipment"

•  Done

• Make "Music" a subsection per WP:FILMMUSIC.

•  Done

Release

• This source doesn't mention "November 25, 2020".
• "and is [...] and as of" - repetitive.

 Fixed

• Home media should be expanded to list its special features.

•  Added

Reception

• Several topics about the film's performance at the box office are unsourced; I marked them with the "citation needed" tag.
• "thanks in-part", "closely behind", "huge jump" - doesn't sound encyclopedic.
• Add a WP:DATECOMMA after June 4, 2021.

•  Done

• The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
• Put IndieWire in italics and wikilink SFGate.

All  Done

Future

• Should be expanded to more than one sentence.

 Done

References

• Sources are archived.
• There are several references on the article's talk page that can be used.
• Wikilink Justin Chang and Rachel Martin (broadcast journalist).

•  Done

• ScreenRant → Screen Rant

•  Done

• I would suggest listing CBR by its full name, Comic Book Resources.

•  Done

• Change quotation marks to apostrophes per WP:QWQ (#18, #41, and #76).

•  Done

• Sort categories in alphabetical order.

•  Done

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@Wingwatchers: could you put {{done}} or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks. Pamzeis (talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

@Pamzeis:  Done Wingwatchers (talk) 02:23, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, All done. Wingwatchers (talk) 18:16, 8 July 2021 (UTC)

Some references still need to be adjusted for WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, thank you Pamzeis for fixing them. [1] Wingwatchers (talk) 02:54, 9 July 2021 (UTC)

I have added three reviews in the "Critical response" section, hopefully, it will pass GA. Wingwatchers (talk) 04:32, 10 July 2021 (UTC)