Talk:Ashur-nirari V/GA1

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 23:56, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. --Usernameunique (talk) 23:56, 10 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

"unprecedent" means there is no other such example. Can that really be said here?

I think it can but I've changed it to "unusually" which should be fine either way. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:36, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox

The dynasty is mentioned only here, not in the lead or body.

I've gotten away without mentioning the dynasty in the lead or body of other articles on kings (Shalmaneser IV, Ashur-dan III, Ashur-etil-ilani); IMO it's not a significant detail - it can't be commented on more than just mentioning it. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:36, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Reign

"He succeeded his brother" — Under what circumstances?

We don't know since the sources are too scant. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:36, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"as king" — of what kingdom?

Added. Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:36, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"During this period" — What period?

Changed to "During this obscure time" which should make it clear that it refers to the aforementioned "obscure period". Ichthyovenator (talk) 17:36, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

What are "inscriptions"?

Expanded to make clear what this means. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"the eponym of 784 BC" — What is this?

Eponyms are defined as "year names" in the first sentence of this paragraph. Per Eponym dating system years were typically named after both an individual and a significant event (which I've now added to this article). Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"the list of eponyms" — So the eponyms weren't just year names, they also included a bit of history?

Amended this as well per the previous point. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"In 748–747 BC, he campaigned against the city of Namri in Urartu and in 755, the year of his accession, he campaigned against Arpad." — Why not put in chronological order?

Don't know - altered so that it is now in chronological order. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Why would a treaty include curses?

Presumably (the cited source does not say so this qualifies as WP:OR) the copy of the treaty that survives is the Assyrian copy; perhaps the campaign did not go the way it was intended. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Succession

"Ashur-nirari is generally regarded to have died in 745 BC" — Why?

Because Tiglath-Pileser III became king in that year (unless there was a co-regency as proposed by Davenport Ashur-nirari must have died then). Also added a sentence that we know that the AKL has some errors. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:14, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"he would have ruled for only 10 years if he died in 744 BC" — But didn't you say that the Assyrian King List says he did, indeed, rule for 10 years?

Yes, the word order was messed up here for some reason. Fixed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 18:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sources

ISBNs should be hyphenated.

I've hyphenated some of the ISBNs. For the remaining ones I cannot find hyphenated versions and Wikipedia:ISBN says to only "use hyphens if they are included". Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:55, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

The ISBN for Crouch 2014 is at the bottom of the copyright page. (There are actually three ISBNs depending on which version you used: hardcover, paperback, or electronic.) Grayson 1982 should be a 10-digit ISBN (WP:ISBN: "if an older work only lists an ISBN-10, use that in citations instead of calculating an ISBN-13 for it. This is because ISBNs are often used as search strings and checksum differences between the two forms make it difficult to find items listed only under the other type."). It's viewable on Google Books: 0-521-22496-9. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:50, 22 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Usernameunique: Thank you, I've amended the refs to Crouch and Grayson. Ichthyovenator (talk) 15:12, 23 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Publishers can be linked.

Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Inconsistent use of initials for authors. I'd suggest spelling them all out.

Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

For the works with multiple editors, suggest using the "name-list-style = amp" parameter.

Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

"The Neo Assyrian Eponyms" is missing the date.

It's a website and does not include the date when it was published. Ichthyovenator (talk) 11:45, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

It's at the bottom: "Last modified: 2015/10/14 16:23 (external edit)". --Usernameunique (talk) 15:44, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I've added this in but does the last modified date count as the original publication date? Ichthyovenator (talk) 16:12, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Usernameunique: Thank you for taking the review! I've responded to all your comments. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:14, 19 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good, passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 03:08, 25 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]