Talk:Meaning of Life (album)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 14:39, 18 April 2019 (UTC)Reply

Lead

which she had won as the → "won" is odd here, use something like "signed"
- Done.
Clarkson wanted the album evoke a music of those artists → Clarkson wanted the album to evoke a music of those artists
- Done.
Clarkson wanted the album evoke a music of those artists had they happen to release their early works in the 21st century → this sentence is kind of complicated; could you simplify it?
- Done. Changed to "to evoke a music similar to the early works of those artists"
To achieve those → To achieve this (since we're only talking about the "soulful spirit")
- Done.
and living in the moment → no need for the "in"
- Done.
the first and latest → the first and last
- Done.
while its supporting concert → winning awards has no connection with live performances. Just begin a new sentence here
- Done.

Infobox

The "Recorded" parametre isn't cited within the article's body
- Done. There's one in the recording section now.

Background

remarking that her structure with Edge and Corson → do you mean "relationship" here? If yes, then you should say that since the other way it's unnecessarily complicated
- Done.
No other issues

Recording and production

were confirmed to return to Meaning of Life → were confirmed to return for Meaning of Life
- Done.
approach a different genre—soul and R&B music,[18] → syntax issue
- Done.
and remarked that the album is a → and remarked that the album was a
- Done.
feel like a " brand new → syntax issue
- Done.
Remove the italics from the last two lines in the first paragraph
- Done.
was a "different process" for her.[20][19] → refs need to be in numerical order
- Done.
once displayed on Idol → say the full name of the show
- Done.
to perform in two selections → what does "selections" mean here?
- Tracks? Changed to album's two tracks.

Composition

Lyrical contents of each of the album's tracks centers → ...center
- Done.
with the early works of divas Aretha Franklin, Mariah Carey, Whitney Houston, En Vogue and Bonnie Raitt → "divas" is too unencyclopedic in this context
- Done. Changed to vocalists
whose soulful catalog has inspired → whose soulful catalogues have inspired (it's more singers)
- Done.
with Clarkson asking "What if Aretha → comma before the quote
- Done.
Raissa Bruner of Time styled its tracks as → use "saw" here since "styled" doesn't quite fit
- Done.
She remarked "This is a record → comma before the quote
- Done.
The "(sic)" shouldn't be in italics
- Done.
an expense on her domestic life → "domestic" is quite a complicated choice here; simply use "family life"
- Done.
mentally, physically in a marriage; and as a mature → mentally, physically in a marriage, as well as a mature
- Done.
the song a minute-long anthem → the song is a minute-long anthem
- Done.
anthem for self-care; and was primarily → just use a normal comma instead of the semicolon
- Done.
take a minute break for herself → even if this sounds odd, this way it's more correct: "take a brek for a minute for herself"
- Done.
while still sounding fresh → "contemporary" is a better and more encyclopedic choice
- Done.
described the song as giving a 100% commitment to one another and a reminiscent of her relationship → described the song as discussing on giving 100% commitment to one another and as reminiscent of her relationship
- Done.
song and the titular track, "Meaning of Life" was → comma before "was"
- Done.
The fifth, "Move You" was → comma before "was"
- Done.
and was inspired by Carey's → with inspiration from Carey's
- Done.
Harlœ & Pat Linehan, and was produced by → Harlœ and Pat Linehan, and was produced by
- Done.
for leaving her high and dry → "high and dry" is very unencyclopedic
- Done. Changed to "forsaking her"
with the latter-most → what should this mean?
- Done. replaced with "who", referring to The Monarch
write a ballad that showcases her vocals, which latter co-wrote based → this sentence doesn't make sense for me
- Done. Changed to "Requested by Clarkson to write a ballad that showcases her vocals, Harlœ based the song from her past relationship."
to take things slow → ...slowly
- Done.
to his sexy advances → "sexy" is superfluous; we understand the meaning
- Done.
sings of demanding a man be honest about his true feelings → is about demanding a man to be honest about his true feelings
- Done.

Release and promotion

which will be followed by a promotional → which would be followed by a promotional
- Done.
and topped the Billboard Dance Club Songs chart → use "ranking" to avoid the repetition of words
- Done.
Link "promotional single"
- Done.
follow-up single on February 9, 2018; followed by "Heat" → normal comma instead of semicolon
- Done.
which visited select U.S. cities from January to March of 2019 → which visited selected U.S. cities from January to March 2019
- Done.
To showcase the album → you mean to "promote" it? 'Cause this would be a better word choice
- Done.
presented Clarkson where she performed six selections the album at the Rainbow Room in New York City → this sentence doesn't make sense
- Done. Changed to "jointly presented Clarkson's performance of the album's six selections at the Rainbow Room in New York City"
where select performances of which were released online → with selected performances being eventually released online
- Done.
on an album release party at the hosted by → this sentence doesn't make any sense gramatically
- Done. Changed to "performed several songs from the album at an album release party hosted by iHeartRadio in Los Angeles"
Youtube Space → YouTube Space; the link should only be to "YouTube" since that place doesn't have its own Wiki page
- Done.
tape broadcast → tape-broadcast
- Done.
featuring select performances by Clarkson → featuring selected performances by Clarkson
- Done.
in various televised events around the world → "around the world" should be removed since it's exaggerating; she didn't perform in that many countries
- Done.

Critical reception

drenched album is full of confidence." and described its → drenched album is full of confidence," describing its
- Done.
gave the album a four star rating → gave the album a four-star rating
- Done.
writing that Clarkson is "in her absolute element" → writing that Clarkson was "in her absolute element"
- Done.
"in her absolute element" in it → "in her absolute element" on it
- Done.
and the album is a "peppier → and the album was a "peppier
- Done.
The last sentence in the first paragraph is missing a quotation mark
- Done.
gave Meaning of Life a four star rating → gave Meaning of Life a four-star rating
- Done.
he wrote it presents → past tense
- Done.
gave the record a three star rating → gave the record a three-star rating
- Done.
writing that the album has "lots of filler" → past tense
- Done.
and notably evokes records → past tense
- Done.
evokes records of Christina Aguilera and Meghan Trainor → Meghan Traino should be linked towards the end of the second paragraph and mentioned by full name there, but not here
- Done.
long since transcended"; and → normal comma is needed here
- Done.
she was puzzled that "almost 15 years after Idol, to hear an album that sounds so much like contractual winner's filler." → this does not make sense gramatically; you need to alter the quote I think
- Done. Changed to "hear an album that sounds so much like contractual winner's filler" almost 15 years after winning the competition"
Section name > Instead of "Award nominations" you could just simply say "Accolades", but it's up to you
- Done.
award-giving programs: including the → a comma is needed here
- Done.
on several publications' year-end lists. → on several publications' year-end lists:
- Done.

Commercial performance

which account 68,000 copies of traditional → which account 68,000 copies in traditional
- Done.
and became her first entry at the Billboard Vinyl → and became her first entry on the Billboard Vinyl
- Done.
and a top forty entry on the national charts of the Austria → the last "the" is not needed
- Done.

Further sections

No issues, tables correctly formatted

Other things

33.8% is (still) a good percentage for copyviolation
- But it's a quotation from the artist. Should I rephrase it?
  - It's okay then. I didn't see that. Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:56, 4 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
1 dead link that needs to be archived
- Done
1 disambiguation link that needs to be fixed
- That's actually for the other similarly titled albums at the top of the article. Should we just remove it?
  - Again, did not see that. It's okay in this case... Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:56, 4 May 2019 (UTC)Reply
As far as I checked them, the references do seem to back up the assertions made in this article

Outcome

On hold for 7 days — a very cohesive article that needs some fixes for GA status. Good luck with editing; Cartoon network freak (talk) 08:27, 23 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
- Done for almost everything. Except two on the other things section. Please check and thanks for the comments. Chihciboy (talk) 13:14, 29 April 2019 (UTC)Reply
  - @Chihciboy: Passing this wonderful article... Is there any possiblity you could also take one of my GANs on review? Greets; Cartoon network freak (talk) 17:55, 4 May 2019 (UTC)Reply

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