Talk:Indio Comahue Monument/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Teb00007 (talk · contribs) 19:56, 3 August 2013 (UTC)

Initial Review

This is just a cursory review of the page. If any problems are identified here, the review will be put on hold for seven days or until the problems are fixed (whichever is sooner), after which a full review will take place.

Please see WP:GACR for full details of the criteria mentioned below.

Y 1. Well-written

N (a), Y (b)

N 2. Verifiable with no original research

N (a), N (b), N (c)

Y 3. Broad in its coverage

Y (a), Y (b)

Y 4. Neutral

Y 5. Stable

Y 6. Illustrated, if possible

Y (a), Y (b)

Comments

1. (a) - several issues:

• • "... of sand. [4] were used." is grammatically incorrect
  • "...can be accessed by two paths, which both end up at the monument." - if it can be "accessed by two paths", surely that already implies the paths end up at the monument and the second half of that sentence is redundant.
  • "The latter seal was replaced in 2009 by the previous one, designed in 1966." does not make sense.

• • • Fixed.--GDuwenTell me! 19:59, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

2. (a) - the tourist guide (second reference) should list the ISBN of the book, which is 9789879310045. Links to the corresponding references should be removed from citations to comply with the relevant style guides. Also, multiple sources are in Spanish, however only a few are indicated as such.

Fixed.--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

2. (b) - the Villa Regina Tourist Board and Argentina Turismo are primary sources and are, therefore, not reliable. Patagonia.com.ar and Rionegro.com.ar also seem like unreliable sources.

The touristic sources were replaced. Rio Negro is a local newspaper, therefore it can be considered a reliable source.--GDuwenTell me! 19:59, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

2. (c) - some unsourced content, including:

• • "...it is used as an overlook for its panoramic view of the town."

Sourced.--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

• • "...designed by the government of the Argentine Revolution."

The article from Al Día sources the line.--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

3. (b) - possibly going into too much detail in the construction section.

IMO The construction section is not that overdetailed, the information is relevant to the article. Any suggestions to trim text?--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

6. - does the image in the The Monument and Villa Regina section have to be centred and as large as it is? Could it not be placed as a thumbnail at the right of the article?

Is it alright now?--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

At the moment, I would say this article far from qualifies for GA status and requires a lot of work. I was tempted to fail the nomination right away, but I'll give the editor time to correct the problems I've identified. --teb00007 ^{Talk • Contributions} 20:37, 3 August 2013 (UTC) )

• All done, waiting for further comments.--GDuwenTell me! 20:30, 6 August 2013 (UTC)

New reviewer

Hi GDuwen, I can take over this review. Comments to follow sometime this week. -- Khazar2 (talk) 18:11, 17 September 2013 (UTC)

Khazar2, just a quick ping to remind you of this review. BlueMoonset (talk) 13:02, 30 September 2013 (UTC)

Sorry for the slowness. I've had unexpected difficulties resuming my internet connection post-move. I hope to be on this later this week. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:13, 30 September 2013 (UTC)

• "The seal was replaced in 2009 by the previous one, designed in 1966" -- I'm not sure I understand this. Isn't the replaced seal the one that was designed in 1966, rather than the replacement seal? -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:53, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

The so-called replace seal was designed back in 1966 by the artist Adalberto Czabanyi, which had been chosen by the democratic authorities of that time through a public contest for design. When the dictatorship (the Government of the Argentinian Revolution) took over, they designed their own in 1969 (on which the Indio Comahue Monument was depicted), so the original seal of 1966 was actually never used until 2009. This site explains the whole story.--Gunt50 (talk) 13:04, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

I rephrased the sentence, I think it is a bit more clear now.--GDuwenTell me! 16:23, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

• The copyright status of the YouTube link isn't clear. I'd suggest it's best not to include in our article per WP:YOUTUBE unless you can verify that this is owned by the uploader.

Link removed.--GDuwenTell me! 16:23, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

These are the only remaining issues I see here on a first look, so this seems close to ready to passing. Sorry again that this got caught in my move hiatus; I'll be on more or less daily in the near future, though. Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:05, 2 October 2013 (UTC)

Okay, that addresses my concerns; thanks for the quick responses. This is a pass. -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:37, 4 October 2013 (UTC)