Talk:History of Chincoteague, Virginia

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:History of Chincoteague, Virginia/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 17:45, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this one; comments to follow in the next 4-7 days. Thanks in advance for your work on it! -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:45, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

Thank you for that.--Wehwalt (talk) 19:52, 13 October 2013 (UTC)

Okay, this looks very good on a first pass. I'll sit down later this afternoon and do a few source checks, look at image licensing, etc., but I don't anticipate any problems there. A few comments below in the meantime:

• Not an action point, but just wanted to comment that the picture of the pony swim is quite lovely. Actually, this has excellent images throughout.
• " initiation of dedicated steamboat service Chincoteague and Franklin City in 1876" -- should this have a "between" or a "to" in it?
• Chincoteague Inlet, a break in the barrier island system, occurs near Chincoteague Island, at the southern end of Assateague Island, that shelters Chincoteague from the Atlantic and that stretches north almost thirty miles to Ocean City, Maryland. -- could this be split into two sentences? The clauses pile up here in a slightly confusing way.
• "a majority for leaving the Union was had" -- the "was had" here seems a bit awkward; is it possible to just say "there was also a majority for leaving the Union in..."
• "got in hot water" -- should be rewritten per WP:IDIOM-- but hilarious detail -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:42, 15 October 2013 (UTC)

I agree on the ponies, the only thing I wonder is if the top and right side should be cropped a bit to make the horses bigger … I've done what you've suggested so far, thanks for reviewing.--Wehwalt (talk) 17:05, 15 October 2013 (UTC)

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Thanks particularly for the photos you yourself contributed.
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass as GA

Significant part of early history of Jengoteag Island

Looks like someone may have missed something in the history of Jengoteag Island. On 02 Oct 1672, all 5,800 acres of Jengoteag Island were granted to Capt. William Whittington. — Preceding unsigned comment added by AdmPope (talk • contribs) 13:40, 21 June 2022 (UTC)

Capt. Jennifer's grant of patent was in 1677 (not 1671)

Captain Whittington [who was granted the Island of Jengoteag in 1672] failed to complete his title and in 1677 the same land was granted by patent to Captain Daniel Jenifer. In Captain Jenifer’s grant it is described as ‘being on the seaboard side in the upper part of the county (Accomac), it being the next island to the northward of Keckotank alias Occocomson’ (now called Wallop’s Island).AdmPope (talk) 13:50, 21 June 2022 (UTC)

Feel free to make changes, adding sources. I no longer have the sources I used when I wrote this 9 years ago.--Wehwalt (talk) 14:15, 21 June 2022 (UTC)

References

Language

Shouldn't we really include the name of the Chincoteague Indians' language instead of just saying "Native American" and "their language"? I made that edit but it was reverted because I guess the person who reverted it didnt believe me that the Chincoteague Indians also known as the Assateague speak Nanticoke. To be honest I got this information from the Assateague page and so if its wrong that page should be changed too. Thomas Norren (talk) 14:01, 27 July 2022 (UTC)

It seems a bit WP:SYNTHy to me. I'd rather stick as closely to the source as possible. If there are additional sources that directly say what "Chincoteague" means, or that it is actually a word (s) in their language, that would be good to add.--Wehwalt (talk) 14:11, 27 July 2022 (UTC)

"Ironclad" Louisiana

Does the source used really refer to USS Louisiana as an ironclad? An iron-hulled vessel isn't the same thing and I haven't seen sources referring to Louisiana as an ironclad proper. Hog Farm _Talk 18:35, 27 July 2022 (UTC)

I don't have the source anymore but I doubt I would have paraphrased it.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:43, 27 July 2022 (UTC)

Having dug into it a bit more, sources specializing in Civil War warships don't call it an ironclad, including Silverstone's fairly authoritative Civil War Navies. I'd recommend referring to it just as a steamship, as the claim of it being an ironclad does not seem to be widely accepted. Hog Farm _Talk 00:08, 28 July 2022 (UTC)

I removed the word and will let it stand at that.--Wehwalt (talk) 02:01, 28 July 2022 (UTC)